Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Many
people
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have argued about the
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assistance
of higher
education
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. A group of
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believe that gaining a degree
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university
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will have a preferable job while others think that studying in
university
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brings more advantages for
graduates
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and
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the community
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. The following paragraphs will explain in
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aboth
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about
both
both
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opinions
, but I do believe that
university
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education
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contributes to the development of both
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individuals
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and society. On the
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hand, it is fact that
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of the preferable benefits is to obtain
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qualified employment.
Graduates
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who are holding a degree have many advantages in the job market and are more flexible to transfer to higher
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on their employment ladder.
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, graduate’s salaries are more valuable than
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non-graduate
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one
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.
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, the average income of
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bachelor
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is up to ten million
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,
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twice compared with
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undergraduates
. Since some sector requires a degree, it becomes a
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mandatory
request in order to
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these fields
such
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as medicine, law, engineering,… .
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, a lot of
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believe that the main purpose of
university
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education
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is to support
graduates
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to exceed their occupation in
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future.
On the other hand
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, another group of
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believe that
university
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education
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makes a positive impact on society and
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individuals
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as well.
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, by spending
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in the
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,
students
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could learn how to improve themselves
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as cooking for
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themselves
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them selves
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, managing life-costs. Since
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have to
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away
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their
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, they become more
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, even creative and
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develop their skills. These
students
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provided the information and knowledge would have a strong
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force for
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the national
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economy in order to invent
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new things
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as medicine for cancer,
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appliance for better daily life.
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, thanks to
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university
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the university
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environment,
students
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have the chance to meet
people
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from many different cultures; after that, they could have
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their
relationship
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relationships
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.
As a result
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, there is a cultural and commercial exchange which is
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of the important elements in
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economic development. In conclusion, some
people
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believe that higher
education
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plays a vital role in
graduate’s
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a graduate’s
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career. In my point of view, I agree that
university
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education
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not only support
graduates
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to have a better job but
also
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promotes the development of community and society.
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