Advertising influence people to buy things such as clothes and shoes . What are problem caused by that ? what solution can be given.

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In
this
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contemporary era,
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advertisement
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advertisements
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become ubiquitous all around the world . It is irrefutable that
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adverts
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promote
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common folk to purchase different things . There are several problems owing to
this
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trend .
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, some effective measures can be
implimented
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implemented
to overcome the issue of
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which
influeneces
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influences
influence
the masses . Both the aspects are articulated in
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trail
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paragraph . Analysing the issues that arise, the
first
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and foremost reason is that
advertisement
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attract mankind to buy that
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products
product
with
different
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a different
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scheme . To cite an example, they use
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celebrity
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celebrities
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to represent the
product
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.
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, not only rich
people
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of society buy that
product
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, but economically poor
people
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also
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buy that
product
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to go with
current
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trend .
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, sometimes
advertisement
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companies
portrays
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the wrong information about the
product
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during
advertisement
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and
people
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become more
attract
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attracted
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to that
product
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.After purchasing that
product
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, they feel dissatisfaction .
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,
company
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the company
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provide more discount on products and
also
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children become
subborn
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stubborn
.
On the contrary
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, some steps must be implemented to rectify these
predicuments
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predicaments
.
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with ,
government
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the government
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should ban that advert
who
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that
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wrongly attract the
people
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. To exemplify ,
government
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the government
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banned the
adverticement
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advertisement
of
cigarette
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cigarettes
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in some
state
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states
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of
india
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, who is injurious for human health .
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to
this
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advert
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,advert
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company should not
dipict
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depict
the
product
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in which children pressurise their parents to buy
that products
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that product
those products
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. On the close scrutiny , I conclude that there are numerous products created due to the advertisements and government
also
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take strict action
againstit
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against it
against
.
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This problems
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This problem
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cannot only solve by higher authority but common folk should
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give
theit
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their
the
that
time and efforts to overcome
this
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issue.
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