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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages

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From the past to now, technology has impacted transportation which becomes increasingly at an
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 speed.
Therefore
, in the future, all the vehicles will pursue an automatic system and only carry passengers. These prove to be numerous hindrances as out of employment and the security concerns. From my perspective, the merits clearly outweigh
drawbacks
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. It is undeniable that these automobiles
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 improved to help people but plenty of voices has disagreed
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 types of automatic transport due to public safety and their unwillingness to give a machine in full control
. It is human nature to prefer to control a situation rather than surrender the outcome to an autonomous machine.
This
 argument is based on the fact that, in the event of a human-caused accident, it is possible to assign blame and punishment or acknowledge that human mistake had a role.
In contrast
, a person who has been seriously injured
as a result
 of a machine-caused collision may reasonably believe that all human autonomy and free will have been taken away from them
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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