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is prison sentence helps in reducing crime? Agree or disagree

In every country, government abides by the notion that its population should follow the proper law and order.
Similarly
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, to maintain the
zerocrime
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zero crime
 rate and to embed the consequence of
crime
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 in people's
mind
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, I would like to say, that
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prison
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sentence
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 must be given to the
person
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 depending on the performed
crime
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. It is of no doubt, that it will set an example for the other people that no
crime
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 should be forgiven no matter how serious or trivial
crime
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 will be. On one hand,
the
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prison
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 punishment surely brings down the
crime
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 rate, but in my opinion, the type of punishment should be based on seriousness and type of
crime
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. Like, if a
person
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 is breaking any traffic rule by driving without
the
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 license,
then
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such
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crime
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 should be handled by imposing
monetary
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a monetary
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 fine on the
person
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not
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 by
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prison
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a prison
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sentence
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.
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, if the same
person
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 driving the car in
reckless
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a reckless
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 manner leading to
the
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a
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 dangerous accident or causing damage not only to others but to self
also
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. In
such
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scenario
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a scenario
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, one must be charged with the
prison
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sentence
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 to make sure no
such
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crime
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 should be repeated in the future by anyone else. To summarize the whole thing, it is suggestable to impose the
prison
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sentence
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 depending on the type of
crime
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 to not only reduce the
crime
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 but
also
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 make people understand that no matter how small or
big
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a big
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crime
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 is, everyone is equal
for
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 law and they cannot be excused from punishment.

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