In some countries young people are not only richer, but also safer and healthier than ever before. However, they are often less happy. What do you think are the reasons for this and what can be done to help?
In the modern era, In many countries, people are often busy
in
getting Change preposition
with
perfect
lifestyle. Correct article usage
the perfect
Although
youngsters have enough money, they do not have time to spend it. Indeed,people are quite healthier these days; Linking Words
however
, They are not satisfied with their current position and often feel Linking Words
said
. In my opinion, youngster's goal-oriented and materialistic natures are the reasons behind their sadness and their families, and employers need to come forward to help them.
There are numerous reasons Correct your spelling
sad
involved
why the young generation Verb problem
apply
unable
to enjoy their wealth. First and foremost, nowadays adults are more career-oriented than before and always busy achieving their goals. Add a missing verb
is unable
Therefore
, they Linking Words
do
not Verb problem
are
satisfy
with their current position Replace the word
satisfied
often
feel sad. Correct word choice
and often
For instance
, many developed regions Linking Words
far
behind the developing nations in terms of contentment index because people in these regions are mostly busy achieving their feat. Add a missing verb
are far
In addition
to Linking Words
this
, the young generation is more materialistic these days. Expensive items like, a luxury home, and a big car are required in order to feel happiness. So, they Linking Words
are
always put more effort Unnecessary verb
apply
to afford
those items.
There are, Change preposition
into affording
however
, some measures that need to Linking Words
adopt
by the employers and the government in order to rectify these kinds of phenomena. Wrong verb form
be adopted
Firstly
, organizations need not put pressure on their employees to work extra hours or work more apart from office hours to get the promotion. Linking Words
For example
, most big companies have policies like, Linking Words
put
extra time in the office or Wrong verb form
putting
do
extra shifts in order to get additional wages. Wrong verb form
doing
Additionally
, the government needs to set some legislation for employers so they can not put mental pressure on the employee to put extra time in Linking Words
office
. These measures are necessary to adopt in reference to help adults.
In conclusion, Correct article usage
the office
although
in most countries, adults are financially strong and healthier than before these days, they often feel sad and not happy. Indeed, their perception regarding happiness Linking Words
in
Correct your spelling
is
measures
in achieving career goals and dreams. The government and the Wrong verb form
measured
employer
need to come forward to help them.Fix the agreement mistake
employers
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