The government should pay to the parents of very young children, so that one of them can stay at home and look after their children. What do you think are the pros and cons of this policy? Justify your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Sentence 3 - Discussion
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formative years
cognitive development
financial burden
low-income families
gender roles
gender equality
workplace
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education
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