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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Gender
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 equality in
education
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 is a major concern.
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, some public believe that the number of
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 of both genders should be equally accepted in all majors.
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, I am of the opinion that as long as the graduate’ potential and ability meet the requirements, they can be accepted regardless of sexes.
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, it is extremely difficult to achieve and maintain the balance in the number of male and female
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. All candidates have their own skills, ability and aspirations that fit specific fields of study.
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, accepting
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 in terms of
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 may lead to discriminating quality of
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, as potential candidates are limited because of their sexes.
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, if
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 is a part of the admission requirements, it is easy to predict that
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 inequality will increase, which is supposed to be avoided.
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, the aim of
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 is to encourage
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 to pursue their dreams and develop their potential.
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, skills, abilities and achievements should be the most important and only standards. Entering a place where
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 are at
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similar levels and aspirations will be a great opportunity for students to be motivated and get better. If
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 cannot be free to dictate their own study and future, society will waste a huge amount of talented and helpful
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. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
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 should not include the requirements of
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 for any reason. It will not reduce the problem of inequality
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 but increase it
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. The admission should strictly base on merit, achievements and aspiration.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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