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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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Computerized
information
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 cause many changes in our day-to-day lives and undoubtedly an indispensable part of our profession, entertainment, and household. It is undeniable that developing technology has drawbacks while
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 our lifestyles day by day.
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agrees
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 that the advantages of
information
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technologies
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outweighs
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its
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 drawbacks.
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 with, many of us using IT during our daily business
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. Many
people
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 use computers for
varies
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 actives
such
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 as
to send
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 mail, attend meetings, store
information
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 and create presentations. Nobody can deny that archiving
information
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 was a challenging task for organisations before computers. But now with the help of cloud
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technologies
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 it is easy to access all
informations
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information
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just
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with just
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in
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one click.
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, there are some drawbacks regarding
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but
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 various developments on the way to improve the progress.
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, many
people
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 using smart
devices
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 as part of their
life
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.
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example
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network integrated
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 household
devices
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 or wearable
technologies
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 became very popular recently. It is possible to access
to
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our smart cleaning device with help of our watch and to clean the house while we are spending our
times
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 outside with our loved ones.
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network connected
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devices
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makes
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 our lives easier and thanks to
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 improvement as
a
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people
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 who live
in
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a
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busy
life
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 we can find time more
ourselves
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for ourselves
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.
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, many
scientist
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scientists
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warn
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 against electromagnetic waves emitted from electrical products can
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affect
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effect
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 human brains and health. I believe that with advancement in IT harmless effect of technological
devices
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 can reduce in recent years. In conclusion, despite a few downsides with the help of
information
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technologies
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people
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 are able to live a
life
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 more productive and to take more time to themselves. I firmly believe that
cons
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 of technological advancement will reduce with the increase of knowledge and experience.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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