Some people think that a large amount of time and money should be spent on the protection of wild animals while other think that is should be better spent on the human population. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

In recent years,
many attentions
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have been drawn
on
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protection
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of wildlife.
Although
some
people
believe that
people
should spend a large amount of
time
and
money
on human beings, I would argue that wild
animals
deserve
people
to input their
time
and
money
up to a point. On the one hand, those who believe spending
money
and
time
on humans is better might argue that
people
are an important component of
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nature, and they can affect the development of
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society
. The government has
responsibility
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to put their budget on the improvement of
quality
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the quality
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of
people
’s life in order to have a better
society
.
For example
, the governments of developing countries should take their
time
and
money
to help the poverties who struggle for life.
However
, if these governments decide to put a large amount of their
time
and
money
on
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wild
animals
, many poor
people
will suffer from
tough
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life.
On the other hand
, my view is that
people
should spend some
money
and
time
on
protection
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of wildlife. The reason for
this
is that those
animals
are important in the ecosystem. For
instant
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, some wild
animals
such
as frogs and birds are quite essential in the food chain. They can eat pests so that
people
do not need to worry about the damage to farms
that
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caused by pests.
In contrast
, if government spend
large
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portion of
budget
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on
human
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population and do not pay attention to the wildlife,
people
can build a better
society
, but there will be
extinctions
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of some wild species. In conclusion,
although
spending
money
and
time
on population can help the development of
society
, I believe that
people
should spend some
money
and
time
on
protection
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the protection
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of wild
animals
in order to have a better ecosystem.
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