Carn ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty year that many cities in the world are now “one big traffic jam” How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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are
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number
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of
people
using personal vehicle and ownership of personal
vehicles
are increased day by day. For
this
reason,
city's
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traffic
system has been distorted as well as increased
road
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roadblock
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block
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with
vehicles
.
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of all, I
agree
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the statement
that is
stated. Most of the city
are
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gathered by
people
all time and town road situation is busy most of the time. They always are moving by any
vehicles
. When we see that one person uses him or her own
car
that will
increased
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our
traffic
jam. Our country's population is ago high that way most of the
people
's living and earning Palace in the town. So, individual
car
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or any
vehicles
can not remove
traffic
jam
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jams
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. It is not
deniedable
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deniable
matter that government of the city should take necessary steps to demotivate of using individual
vehicles
. The ruler of the country can impose high custom
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and
tax
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on luxurious goods
as
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like
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car
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cars
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.
Also
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government can arrange alternative public transportation that will discourage to use
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persian
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car
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. The government
also
create awareness among
people
about
problem
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the problem
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of
traffic
jam and should be telecast news through the television channel which really would be effective steps regarding
this
issue.
At
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the end, I would like to approach
to
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the
people
about remove the solution and for
this
reason
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all should use public transportation
instead
of personal
vehicles
.
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