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You want to arrange a conference for your company and you need to ask one of your colleagues to give a presentation in this conference. Write a letter to your colleague. In your letter include: • Details about the conference • Why you want your colleague to give presentation • What arrangement will you do for this conference

#conference #company #colleagues #presentation #colleague #arrangement
Dear
Mr.
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 Sarmad I am writing to ask for your help in
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 Mining conference which is going to be held
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20th
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 of July in Milad tower. Hundreds of professional developers from
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 companies in IT will join our conference. It will be in 2 days.
First
 It will start with
introduction
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 with
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 statistics and
data
 engineering courses
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 Tuesday. The
second
 day will be just workshops to help them learn and write project’s codes in Python. As you are one of the most powerful persons in
this
 field I would rather
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invite you to be with our team
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specially
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in
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 the
first
 day by giving a presentation about basic statistics needed for analyzing
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data
. Being the
first
 person in your field is not always easy as every rose has its own thorns! I have to coordinate presentations and
also
 workshop teams.
Moreover
, finding the best key parameter indicators to measure
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 of the attendees with the goal of choosing them for our
data
 science summer camp is the hardest part. I count on you in that part too. I am looking forward to your answer. It is critical to
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 me in 48 hours. Yours Sincerely, Maria
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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