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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#children #form #discipline
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Some people believe that corporal punishment is the best way of discipline .
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, in
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 demographic era of
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this
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 is not
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 way to punish by striking them . These people still think it is popular among their
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surrounding
 world .I completely disagree with
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 statement . In the following
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i
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 as if
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 happens child will show behavioural changes .
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,
parents
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 believe that beating their kids will make them
better
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person
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 and they will know to behave with others .
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 example , a decade ago folks used to hit their
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children
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 different ways so that they
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don't
 make
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 mistake again and think twice before doing that .
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,
parents
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 were worried by doing
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 as they lose control
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offspings
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offsprings
offspring's
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 which will turn in
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 but somehow beating them regularly will make them
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separated
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 from their support.
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 , smacking children will badly affect their brain health , personality and in long run make them rebellious .
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 of forcing them to be
discplined
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disciplined
 ,
parents
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 should talk to them in
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 way so that they listen to them as children will do things what their
parents
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 have taught them .
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 , at some point
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time
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 they start hiding things with them as they would
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 to tell and which led to serve them
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low
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 and create
depression
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in
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 younger age and they become violent and aggressive .Moving
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 , there should be strict
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aganist
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against
parents
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 all over
country
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 as in abroad if you slap your kid cops will come
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and
 arrest .
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 , it must for guardians not to beat their juvenile . In a nutshell , people who are in favour of spanking punishment is
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 understanding of punishment and they are wrongly linking to discipline . in my
opinion
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 there are numerous ways to teach them
discpline
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discipline
 and make them
better
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a better
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 person .
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