Nowadays, people have developed poor eating habits and do not eat balanced diet. What are the reasons behind this? Suggest possible solutions to control this.

In recent years,poor eating
habits
becomes
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a terrible issue all over the world.On
this
account,a large number of
people
are observed to be negligent of their health and damaging their selves by eating unbalanced diets without any control of their bad eating
habits
and they are dealing with being overweight and other unsuitable well-being.
Besides
this
difficulty,eating quickly,eating too much junk
food
,eating
food
without any
time
planning,eating without any diet are some critical reasons which lead to unhealthy
people
.
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essay delves into the requirement to set up reasons for
this
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these
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poor
habits
and to develop various solutions to tackle
this
problem. To being with, nowadays numerous
people
are dealing with their
time
,absolutely life has become busy these days.
Hunestly
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Honestly
nobody finds enough
time
to devote to preparing
food
at home,which
are
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healthy for the human body.For
this
reason,
people
are left with no option to consume fast
food
.
On the other hand
,
people
enjoy eating quickly and
this
issue just can solve by nutritionists and doctors.Those who have studied in
this
field should inform it in any way
such
as
healthy
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health
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news and Tv programs to encourage
people
too
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eat slowly, but
unfortunately
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they do not have enough
time
to do
this
, so one
such
effective solution can be implemented by the government by creating awareness about healthy living.They can do it for
people
.They can build some health centres as well as gym clubs or nutrition clubs where can
people
can build their
body
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.
Instead
of these
centres
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they can give
people
some
times
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time
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during their busy days,
such
as
lunch
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lunchtime
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time
for two hours a day or some brakes that can enjoy or prepare some healthy
food
for their selves and get back to work more energetic.Apart from
this
, individuals can take responsibility
of
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their near and dear ones to encourage eating
home prepared
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food
as compared to fast
food
which can be allowed,
for example
, once a week. To sum up, eating badly is
serious
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issue that
it
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relates to health.Along with the steps taken by
government
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the government
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and the positive attitude towards
this
problem
adoped
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adopted
by the majority of
people
themselves,without their will nobody can help in
controling
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controlling
the poor eating
habits
.
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