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Some people believe that children's time outside of school should be filled with scheduled activities such as art and music classes and sports. others feel that children need free time to play and relax. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Many juveniles think about their future. They make a proper timetable for their daily routine. Some people think that
children
 should spend some
time
 in co-curricular
activities
such
 as art and music classes and sports.
On the other hand
, some believe that
kids
 should relax and play in their free
time
. I am in agreement with the former view.
This
 essay will discuss both views in the forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with, the daily routine
activities
such
 as dance or art develop skills in the juveniles. It helps them to find another talent. Extra
activities
 helps them to achieve success in their life. It
also
 refreshes the mind of
kids
 and boosts their energy
level
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. If today's generation of
kids
 will join extra classes before or after school
time
 they can enhance their skills.
For instance
, In America, a survey was conducted which found that 70% of students who enrol on co-curricular
activities
 are more successful than those who only focus on curriculum
activities
. Extra
activities
 provide lots of opportunities to the
children
.
On the other hand
, many people believe that
children
 should spend
time
 relaxing and play. When the
children
 spend
time
 with their parents, siblings it helps them to learn moral and ethical values. It
also
 helps them to make
a stronger bonds
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 with their parents and siblings. Some
kids
 spend
time
 with their grandparents which helps them to learn many things. To conclude, In my opinion,
children
 should make their daily routine to do some extra
activities
 which help them to achieve a particular goal in their life and parents will encourage them to fulfil their aim.
Submitted by Rajwinder Kaur on

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