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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrated the
wave-energy
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machine
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's design and location. There are 2 chambers in the
wave-energy
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machine
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. The upper part contains a turbine and allows the
air
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flow
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to flow
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 in and out between the bottom
chamber
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 and the atmosphere. The bottom
chamber
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 allows the water
flow
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to flow
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 in with the wave direction. The
wave-energy
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machine
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 has an electricity generator which
connected
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 to the turbine. When the water
flows
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 into the bottom
chamber
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, the water level
rised
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rises
rise
rose
 which
cause
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causes
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air
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flows
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 into the upper
chamber
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. The
air
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flows
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though
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through
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 the upper
chamber
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 to
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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 and there
also
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air
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flows
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 in from the atmosphere to the chambers. The location options of the
wave-energy
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 machines are essential to the output result. When the
machine
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placed
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is placed
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 on the shallow coast, since there are small waves, the output would be low,
however
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, the costs of installation would be
also
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 low.
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,
higher
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the higher
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 output would
been
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be
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 received when the
machine
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 is placed far from the coast. Of
couse
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course
, the costs of installation would be high.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wave-energy, machine, air, chamber, flows with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 2 times.
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