Write about the following topic. Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, online shopping has been more and more popular. Some
people
thinks
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this
shopping method gives more
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benefits
to them than
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bad effects. I will explain why the advantages of
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online
shopping
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outweugh
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outweigh
the
disvantages
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disadvantages
with my own experiences.
First
of all, online shopping is more
time
saving and cheaper than
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traditional shopping
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no
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doubt. Take planning an out-bound trip as an example, in the past,
people
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to go to the travel agents to get their flight
tickects
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tickets
, accommodations or theme park tickets, which might
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a half day
time
to manage all of them,
however
, with online shopping, I could finish all the ticket and hotel bookings within an hour.
Besides
, there would be
less
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options from the travel agents, since they have contracts to certain hotels or airlines,
therefore
they normally have a fixed price.
In contrast
, there are many platforms offering different prices, brands and discounts for booking
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tickets and hotel rooms online. We can always find a cheaper option when we have
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options to choose
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.
Although
online platform seems not reliable, there
are
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more and more regulation on them to
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protect
protest
the customer
alreeady
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already
. Online shopping offers more options in seconds and allows us to choose more
time
saving, cheaper and easier.
Besides
,
tradational
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traditional
shopping is not friendly to everyone.
People
live in
rural
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area usually need to drive about half an hour or more to the shopping nearby or even just the grocery store. Most of them are elderly, they are not able to go too far from home or age care centre, shopping becomes difficult to them.
Also
, for the shift worker, they may not able to go to shopping in the trading hours. With online shopping, those
problem
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solved. There will be no more
time
limits and distance will not be a problem
any more
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.
People
would say it is hard to shop without seeing the real products,
however
, in my opinion,
this
is just a habit and when
people
used to do online shopping, there are no needs to
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buy
a product after seeing the real one. With the advance of technology,
people
can easily search and buy things that they want and need. So why bother to wake up early and drive more than
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hour
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to go shopping? There are more examples to support online shopping has more advantages and
disavantages
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disadvantages
but most
impotantly
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importantly
,
time saving
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has been essential
to
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people
to make a decision.
On the other hand
, online shopping offers lower
cost
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costs
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to
people
. These two main reasons enough to convince
people
the
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online
shopping has more
benifits
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benefits
than
the
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disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • product selection
  • geographic limitations
  • price comparisons
  • physical inspection
  • customer satisfaction
  • delivery delay
  • online fraud
  • scams
  • trusted websites
  • notable disadvantages
  • increasingly popular
  • beneficial method
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