Write about the following topic. Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Nowadays, online shopping has been more and more popular. Some
people
thinks
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think
this
shopping method gives more benifits
to them than Correct your spelling
benefits
the
bad effects. I will explain why the advantages of Correct article usage
apply
onlne
shopping Correct your spelling
online
is
Change the verb form
are
outweugh
the Correct your spelling
outweigh
disvantages
with my own experiences.
Correct your spelling
disadvantages
First
of all, online shopping is more time
saving and cheaper than the
traditional shopping Correct article usage
apply
with
Change preposition
without
no
doubt. Take planning an out-bound trip as an example, in the past, Correct determiner usage
a
people
needs
to go to the travel agents to get their flight Change the verb form
need
tickects
, accommodations or theme park tickets, which might Correct your spelling
tickets
takes
a half day Change the verb form
take
time
to manage all of them, however
, with online shopping, I could finish all the ticket and hotel bookings within an hour. Besides
, there would be less
options from the travel agents, since they have contracts to certain hotels or airlines, Change the quantifier
fewer
therefore
they normally have a fixed price. In contrast
, there are many platforms offering different prices, brands and discounts for booking the
tickets and hotel rooms online. We can always find a cheaper option when we have Correct article usage
apply
hundreds
options to choose Add the preposition
ofhundreds
with
. Change preposition
from
Although
online platform seems not reliable, there are
more and more regulation on them to Change the verb form
is
protet
the customer Correct your spelling
protect
protest
alreeady
. Online shopping offers more options in seconds and allows us to choose more Correct your spelling
already
time
saving, cheaper and easier.
Besides
, tradational
shopping is not friendly to everyone. Correct your spelling
traditional
People
live in rural
area usually need to drive about half an hour or more to the shopping nearby or even just the grocery store. Most of them are elderly, they are not able to go too far from home or age care centre, shopping becomes difficult to them. Add an article
the rural
a rural
Also
, for the shift worker, they may not able to go to shopping in the trading hours. With online shopping, those problem
solved. There will be no more Fix the agreement mistake
problems
time
limits and distance will not be a problem any more
. Correct your spelling
anymore
People
would say it is hard to shop without seeing the real products, however
, in my opinion, this
is just a habit and when people
used to do online shopping, there are no needs to buty
a product after seeing the real one. With the advance of technology, Correct your spelling
buy
people
can easily search and buy things that they want and need. So why bother to wake up early and drive more than half
Add a hyphen
half-hour
hour
to go shopping?
There are more examples to support online shopping has more advantages and Correct article usage
an hour
disavantages
but most Correct your spelling
disadvantages
impotantly
, Correct your spelling
importantly
time saving
has been essential Add a hyphen
time-saving
to
Change preposition
for
people
to make a decision. On the other hand
, online shopping offers lower cost
to Fix the agreement mistake
costs
people
. These two main reasons enough to convince people
the onling
shopping has more Correct your spelling
online
benifits
than Correct your spelling
benefits
the
disadvantages.Correct article usage
apply
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