Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, online shopping has been more and more popular. Some

people

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this

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shopping method gives more

benifits

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benefits

to them than

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apply

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bad effects. I will explain why the advantages of

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online

shopping

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outweugh

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outweigh

the

disvantages

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disadvantages

with my own experiences.

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of all, online shopping is more

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saving and cheaper than

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traditional shopping

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doubt. Take planning an out-bound trip as an example, in the past,

people

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needs

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to go to the travel agents to get their flight

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tickets

, accommodations or theme park tickets, which might

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a half day

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to manage all of them,

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, with online shopping, I could finish all the ticket and hotel bookings within an hour.

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, there would be

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options from the travel agents, since they have contracts to certain hotels or airlines,

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they normally have a fixed price.

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, there are many platforms offering different prices, brands and discounts for booking

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tickets and hotel rooms online. We can always find a cheaper option when we have

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options to choose

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online platform seems not reliable, there

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more and more regulation on them to

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protect

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the customer

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already

. Online shopping offers more options in seconds and allows us to choose more

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saving, cheaper and easier.

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tradational

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traditional

shopping is not friendly to everyone.

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live in

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area usually need to drive about half an hour or more to the shopping nearby or even just the grocery store. Most of them are elderly, they are not able to go too far from home or age care centre, shopping becomes difficult to them.

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, for the shift worker, they may not able to go to shopping in the trading hours. With online shopping, those

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solved. There will be no more

time

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limits and distance will not be a problem

any more

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anymore

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People

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would say it is hard to shop without seeing the real products,

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, in my opinion,

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is just a habit and when

people

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used to do online shopping, there are no needs to

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buy

a product after seeing the real one. With the advance of technology,

people

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can easily search and buy things that they want and need. So why bother to wake up early and drive more than

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hour

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to go shopping? There are more examples to support online shopping has more advantages and

disavantages

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disadvantages

but most

impotantly

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importantly

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time saving

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has been essential

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for

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people

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to make a decision.

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, online shopping offers lower

cost

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people

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. These two main reasons enough to convince

people

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the

onling

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online

shopping has more

benifits

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benefits

than

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apply

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disadvantages.

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to illustrate this
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such as
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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441 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

convenience
product selection
geographic limitations
price comparisons
physical inspection
customer satisfaction
delivery delay
online fraud
scams
trusted websites
notable disadvantages
increasingly popular
beneficial method

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