Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, online shopping has been more and more popular. Some
people
think
this
shopping method gives more benefits to them than disadvantages. I will explain why the advantages of online shopping have outweighed the disadvantages with my own experiences.
First
of all, online shopping is more
time
saving and cheaper than traditional shopping
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doubt. Take planning an out-bound trip as an example, in the past,
people
need to go to the travel agents to get their flight tickets, accommodations or theme park tickets, which might take a half-day to manage all of them,
however
, with online shopping, I could finish all ticket and hotel bookings within an hour.
Besides
, there would be fewer options from the travel agents, since they have contracts to certain hotels or airlines,
therefore
they normally have a fixed price.
In contrast
, there are many platforms offering different prices, brands and discounts for booking tickets and hotel rooms online. We can always find a cheaper option when we have hundreds of options to choose from.
Although
online platform seems not reliable, there is more and more regulation on them to protect the customers already. Online shopping offers more options in seconds and allows us to choose more
time
saving, cheaper and easier.
Besides
, traditional shopping is not friendly to everyone.
People
live in the rural area usually need to drive about half an hour or more to the shopping
center
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nearby or even just the grocery store. Most of them are elderly, they are not able to travel too far from home or age care centre, shopping becomes difficult to them.
Also
, for the shift workers, they may not able to go
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shopping
whithin
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within
the trading hours. With online shopping, those problems solved. There will be no more
time
limits and distance will not be a problem
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.
People
would say it is hard to shop without seeing the real products,
however
, in my opinion,
this
is just a habit and when
people
used to do online shopping, there are no needs to shop after seeing the real one. With the advance of technology,
people
can easily search and buy things that they want and need. So why bother to wake up early and drive more than
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to go shopping? There are more examples to support online shopping has more advantages than
disavantages
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disadvantages
, but most
impotantly
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importantly
,
time saving
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has been essential
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people
to make a decision.
On the other hand
, online shopping offers lower
cost
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to
people
. These two main reasons enough to convince
people
the
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online
shopping has more
benifits
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benefits
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disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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