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Band 8

You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish you complain to the supermarket. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter -Say who you are -Give details about the accident -Suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents. Write at least 150 words. You do Not need to write any addresses.

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Georgiana Liu living near one of your branches in downtown Stouffville. I am writing to bring to your attention the accident that happened to me inside your supermarket
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 Sunday afternoon. As usual, I was there to buy some groceries. When I passed through the entrance of the washroom, I suddenly
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 over the floor cleaner that dripped from the mop. It could be worse if I didn’t protect my neck and head with my hands. Fortunately, I just got small bruising on my rear end from the accident. Your staff apologized to me and took me to the hospital.
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, I am still in a state of shock because I can’t imagine how it could be worse if
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 happened to an elder
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 of me. I would be grateful if your staff could take action to prevent
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 kind of accident by setting a warning sign every time they clean the floor. I trust that you will address
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 concern as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Georgiana Liu

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Task Achievement
To further enhance your letter, consider providing more specific details or suggestions on how the supermarket can prevent similar incidents, such as mentioning regular inspections or specific safety training for staff.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure to use varied sentence structures and vocabulary to maintain the reader's interest and demonstrate a wide range of English skills.
Logical Structure
Your letter effectively follows the structure of a formal letter, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
Complete Response
You have successfully addressed all parts of the task, providing information about who you are, detailed accounts of the accident, and suggestions for improvement.
Suitable Writing Tone
The tone throughout the letter matches the seriousness of the situation and remains suitably formal and polite for a letter to a supermarket manager.
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