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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

#country #language
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 been some people
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 that, while staying abroad, the inability to communicate properly with others due to
language
 boundary may lead to detrimental effects, both social and practical. Personally, I am completely in support
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this
 opinion. As for the social problems caused by speaking a foreign
language
, you may have a hard time understanding what the locals
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say. They speak very quickly, sometimes skip over a word or put in a phrase to which have increased the difficulty level. A foreigner, regardless of how fluent they are, cannot hope to comprehend the meaning of
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 that people always throw around. It is true the other way around too. It would be a serious challenge for the locals to make out your words through your strange accents. There are many words that, though an accent, sound like others, which is confusing.
This
 will ultimately
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 to your alienation from the surrounding community, a stranger in a stranger place.
Then
 comes the practical ones. With the lack of understanding between individuals, aids become something very much rare. Usually, the locals are quite hospitable to
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. They would help you with the way around, famous attractions and even let you stay the night.
However
, none of these would be real if there is no sufficient communication. You would be left on your own, where dangers may kick unbeknown to you. You might even lose some opportunities that can change lives because of
language
 problems.
For example
, a job was to be handed to either you or a local. Since your
language
 skill is worse than the other, you lose the job, despite the fact that you might be better. In conclusion, being in a country where you must speak another
language
 can and will results in many unwanted issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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