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Schools in some countries require their students to wear a uniform. What are the positives and negatives of this rule?

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Uniform is considered customary in multiple scenarios like military, industries and education .Various nations around the world make it mandatory and
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 regulate it . With few drawbacks like a financial overload on parents,there are certainly many positives like integrity & discipline among schoolgoers. The similarity in colour and patterns of clothes represents students as they are the same in spite of their religion, caste and colour . Same dress code
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 shows and make the student feel that they have equal rights in pursuing education even though some belong to poor families and some to richer ones . Schools are places where students connect with lots of peers and it becomes easy to connect or socialise because they found others similar to themselves . Making it mandatory
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 teaches students to follow rules and maintain discipline in life . With advantages, there are some disadvantages of making uniforms mandatory and the most serious one is
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 extra financial pressure . In underdeveloped countries ,it is often seen as parents don’t allow children to attend school due to lack of money .By making things mandatory like particular clothes or
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particular types of shoes increases the risk of children from poor societies abandoning education . It can be concluded that uniform helps in building unity and equality among children in schools but it
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 becomes a reason for many for being abandoning from educational institutes .
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