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Band 4.5

When asked to choose between a life without work and working most of the time, people would always choose not to work. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion

#life #work #time #people
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A matter of considerable controversy at present is when asking
people
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 to select between
work
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-free
life
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 or working
life
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, the majority of individuals prefer not to
work
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,
although
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 having no
work
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 in
life
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have
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 several benefits but having a job is quite beneficial. On the one hand, most
of
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people
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the people
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 are in favour of
life
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 without
work
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, as since from their childhood they have
desire
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the desire
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 to spend a
life
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 with full of
relaxtation
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relaxation
 because at that time their parents are there to help them.
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,
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a plethora
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 of works are
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indulging
 in serious kind of hazards and every
work
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 has their own pros and cons. In
this
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 contemporary era, everyone
have
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 to
work
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 to survive and basic needs
that
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can only be achieved when
people
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work
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.
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, ample of individuals left their
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 in pandemic to revive the government's rebate
such
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 as
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 amount.
On the other hand
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, finding
job
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at
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present
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 era is not
a
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an
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 easy task for everyone. There are
bunch
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a bunch
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 of degree holders
are
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who are
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 looking for
work
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 after their studies to achieve their goals
of
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in
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life
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. So, having
a
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work
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work
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 is far more beneficial rather than jobless.
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, to meet with expensive or to create a balance of
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a
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an
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 income is most from any source. Apart from the basic needs to enjoy the luxury
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 or to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 ambitions of heart,
human
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a human
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 being needs money.
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, a recent survey done by Queensland university that approximately eighty
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 population of the nation are struggling to beat their e everyday expense. To conclude, as
vast
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 proportion of
people
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 are in favour of
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work
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life
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, whereas, having
work
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 has tremendous advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • personal interests
  • social isolation
  • structured daily routine
  • sense of purpose
  • achievement
  • boredom
  • overworking
  • burnout
  • hobbies
  • family time
  • work pressures
  • stress
  • health issues
  • social interactions
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