It is said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is best both for the individual and for society. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, some youngers are interested to get married early and some don’t want to get

marry

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because they want to be married after career satisfaction. But, wedlock before 30 is not well good for both child as well as their family. Because they are not much able to take responsibility. I think parents can not force their

children

to get engaged before their interests.

To begin

with, in Indian culture married before 30

age

is good for both societies as well as

children

. As per old

age

people

, early marriage has more benefits like no health issues because

age

group below thirty has high fertility to get birth to a child and

people

get free early from their responsibility.

For instance

, now in fast life

people

eat fast food due to

this

reason they suffer from fertility problem.

Secondly

, a wedding before 30 has some side effects since

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children

are not satisfied with their carrier as well as they can not achieve their dream job in between 30 years.

For example

, due to lack of education

people

got a poor hike in their job and that’s why they are financially weak before thirty

age

also

they cant borrow needful for their family.

Last

but not least,

the

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another advantage is that sometimes

children

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not mentally as well as physically prepare to choosing

their

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a partner or staying with

partner

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so in that case, they face helplessness and severe depression problem.

For example

, a love marriage below 30

age

is still not working for a long time owing to less experience about

people

and due to immaturity poor adjustment as well as understanding between both.

Lastly

, I think marriage is the most important stage for young

people

so don’t force them. Parents give them suggestions for weddings . but, the final decision is depending on

child

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. And after 30 they are independent to take their own decision.

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3Word repetition
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

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Topic Vocabulary:

Fertility
Maternal health
Psychological stability
Social maturity
Economic benefits
Shared responsibilities
Ancestral customs
Cultural imperatives
Personal development
Career establishment
Societal norms
Lifestyle choices
Divorce rates
Life decisions
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Fully explain your ideas

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