In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is considered very important. Why might this be the case? Is this a positive or negative development?

In many nations around the world,
to own
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a
house
is most crucial for the
people
instead
of living in a rented
one
.
This
essay will consider various factors behind
this
, and the negative impacts
this
situation
bring
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in
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to
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people
's lives. The native
people
of certain countries have
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a tendancy
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tendancy
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tendency
to purchase their own houses.
This
is because owning a
house
is considered
as
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a prestigious thing and
also
people
do it from an investment point of view.
On
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contrast,
people
in my country often think a person is poor if he does not own a
house
. Another key reason, the population considers
while
purchasing a
house
is that - it will serve as an investment in the long run.
For example
,
one
of my
friend
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has purchased two flats in India, just for
the
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investment purposes. There are negative factors involved in owning a
house
rather
living
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than living
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in a rented
one
. To buy a
house
, there is often
heavy
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a heavy
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home-loan
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is involved. Because of
this
,
people
tend to pay large
amount
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amounts
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of
hard earned
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money to book a
house
.
This
makes
people
to
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lose huge
sum
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sums
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in
one
go.
This
amount can be easily invested in
the
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Mutual Funds or bank schemes to generate more money
instead
of spending it on the
house
.
For instance
,
one
of my
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friends
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friend
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friends
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took a
house
worth 50Lakhs and paid 30Lakh as a down payment to the Bank, which he could have kept as his retirement funds to earn high interest on that. In conclusion, though owning a
house
is seen as
reputable
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thing,
but
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people
often get involved
in
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losing their
lifes'
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savings just to own a
house
and
cost
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the cost
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of houses decreases
day-by-day
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day by day
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, which is definitely not an attractive thing to do.
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