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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is considered very important. Why might this be the case? Is this a positive or negative development?

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In many nations around the world, owning a
house
 is most crucial for the
people
instead
 of living in a rented
one
.
This
 essay will consider various factors behind
this
, and the negative impacts
this
 situation bring on
people
's lives. The native
people
 of certain countries have a
tendancy
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tendency
 to purchase their own houses.
This
 is because owning a
house
 is considered
as
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a prestigious thing and
also
people
 do it from an investment point of view. In the contrast,
people
 in my country often think a person is poor if he does not own a
house
. Another key reason, the population considers while purchasing a
house
 is that - it will serve as an investment in the long run.
For example
,
one
 of my
friend
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friends
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 has purchased two flats in India, just for
the
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investment purposes. There are negative factors involved in owning a
house
 rather
living
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than living
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 in a rented
one
. To buy a
house
, there is often heavy home-loan is involved. Because of
this
,
people
 tend to pay
large
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a large
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amount
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amounts
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 of
hard earned
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hard-earned
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 money to book a
house
.
This
 makes
people
to
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lose
huge
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a huge
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sum
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sums
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 in
one
 go.
This
 amount can be easily invested in
the
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Mutual Funds or bank schemes to generate more money
instead
 of spending it on the
house
.
For instance
,
one
 of my
friend
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friends
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 took a
house
 worth 50Lakhs and paid 30Lakh as a down payment to the Bank, which he could have kept as his retirement funds to earn high interest on that. In conclusion, though owning a
house
 is seen as
reputable
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 thing, but
people
 often get involved in losing their
lifes'
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life's
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 savings just to own a
house
 and
cost
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the cost
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 of houses decreases
day-by-day
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day by day
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, which is definitely not an attractive thing to do.
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  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

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