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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph depicts data
of
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 admissions of
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international and native scholars of Australia in
Australian
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universities
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 over a decade
that is
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 from 2001 to 2010.
Firstly
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, it can be seen that in 2001 local
pupils
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 who commenced their studies in
Australian
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universities
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 were almost ten times the overseas
pupils
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 that are to say 20, 000 overseas and 2, 00, 000
undergraduate
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undergraduates
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 from Australia. But in ten years the interest in international graduates to study abroad increased and the count of overseas
pupils
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 reached 80000 with
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steady growth with every passing year.
While
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 no
such
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 change has been noticed in terms of the local scholars as even after ten years, candidates who initiated studies in local
universities
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 are almost the same as in 2001.
Secondly
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, in relation to the total
number
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 of
students
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 in
Australian
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universities
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, the data shown is somewhat distinct as in these a drastic change happened regarding both kinds of
students
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. The
number
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 of total foreign
students
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 hiked 4 times in 2010(80, 000) as compared to 2001 (20, 000).
Similarly
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, if we talk about local
students
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 the trend shows a gradual increase in the total
number
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 of
pupils
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 from 2001 to 2006 but after 2006 there is no increase in the
number
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 of native
students
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.
To conclude
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, it is observed that the figure of local
students
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 is much more than overseas
students
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 and over the decade no change has been seen in
this
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 trend
on the contrary
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 with the passage of time interest in international
students
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 is inclining toward
Australian
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universities
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, universities, pupils, number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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