Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Other, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measure are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In today's modern world,
health
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major issue in day to
daylife
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day life
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. People are getting worried
for
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about
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their fitness . Few individuals have believed
taht
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that
health
can be improved
bybadding
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by adding
sports
facilities as a part of our daily routines,while
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others
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this
due to its effects.
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and
adopt for their
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better
well being. Advocates of introducing
sports
have stated that
however
,
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society has been dealing with
hazardeous
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hazardous
health
issies
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issues
.
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, due to the advancement of
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electronics
gadgets
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humans life becomes easy that needs no physical movement.
As a
result
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,result
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their physical
activities
had been
dimimnishing
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diminishing
.
For instance
, the individual works in a company, his job is to sit on a chair all long day,
this
reults
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results
in less physical
movementand
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movement and
movement
this
will lead to many
health
issues like obesity, gastrointestinal problems etc.
Furthermore
,
sedentary
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a sedentary
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lifestyle is
also
a
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main reason for
health
issues. In regards to
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the government should impose
the
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high penalties on
high fat
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high-fat
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foods. The exercise
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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should be installed on public
parls
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parks
parcels
by the council authorities.
Public
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also
indulge themselves in any
sports
activities
of their interest like swimming .
Additionally
, few
belived
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believed
believe
that, by introducing the fitness machines or
sports
activities
, it could
effect
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affect
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on
indivdual
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individual
health
. because some humans
doesn't
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know how to select the
activities
according to their
health
otherwise
it would be
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adversely. To conclude that ,
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strongly admit that, the individual should actively participate in any
health
fitness programme but under some special guidance or by keeping in mind their
health
problems. Along with all these
diet
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also
plays
important
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an important
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role .So, along with any physical
activities
,
balanced
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a balanced
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diet
also
be
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is
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added.
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