Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities.Other,however,say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measure are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In today's modern world,
health
is
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major issue in day-to-day life. People are getting worried
for
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about
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their fitness. Few individuals have believed that
health
can be improved by adding
sports
facilities as a part of our daily routines, while others oppose
this
due to its effects.
This
essay will argue what should humans
adopt
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adapt
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for their better well being. Advocates of introducing
sports
have stated that
however
,
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society has been dealing with hazardous
health
issues.
Moreover
, due to the advancement of
the
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electronic gadgets human’s life becomes easy that needs no physical movement.
As a result
, their physical
activities
had been diminishing.
For instance
, the individual works in a company, his job is to sit on a chair all long day,
this
results in less physical movement and
this
will lead to many
health
issues like obesity, gastrointestinal problems etc.
Furthermore
,
sedentary
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lifestyle is
also
a
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main reason for
health
issues. In regards to
this
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,this
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the government should impose
the
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high penalties on
high fat
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foods. The exercise equipment should be installed
on
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in
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public parks by the council authorities.
Public
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The public
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also
indulge themselves in any
sports
activities
of their interest like swimming.
Additionally
, few believed that,
by
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apply
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introducing
the
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apply
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fitness machines or
sports
activities
, it could
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affect
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effect
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affect
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on
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individual
health
. because some humans don’t know how to select the
activities
according to their
health
otherwise
it would be affected adversely. To conclude
that
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,
i
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strongly admit that, the individual should actively participate in any
health
fitness program but under some special guidance or by keeping in mind their
health
problems. Along with all these, diets
also
plays
important
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role. So, along with any physical
activities
,
balanced
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a balanced
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diet
also
be
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added.
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