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People want to immigrate to rich countries. What are the reasons? Is this positive or negative?

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In recent, years we have seen
people
 from developing nations are immigrate to the developed
countries
such
 as the US, the UK for a better lifestyle and
people
 more attractive to the western culture, in my ,opinion it is negative for
countries
 and
people
.
To begin
, immigration is not new to our
world
, it is there from the early days when the British controlled the Asia
countries
. they have moved
people
 from India, Ireland to the UK and various parts of the
world
 to do tea planting, labour workers. In the modern ,
world
this
 has revoulded and the immigration programs in rich
countries
 calling the talented
people
. for ,example developing
countries
 like India suffer from young talent resources. most of them are after eduction wanted move abord and
work
 expecting a better lifestyle. Many developed
countries
 are skilled
people
such
 as like hairdress, nurses, carpenters. due to the ,pay high
people
 to immigrate and
work
 when they are moving out their own place it creates an inadequate supply in the market makes insufficient
people
 demand. to avoid all these
people
 should try to
work
 in their own
countries
 and make their livelihood. Inconclusion,
People
 should be mind full before to immigration, if they find working skill doesn't give proper
work
 in own
countries
 finding a better opportune in different
countries
,
otherwise
 they should
work
 on the same
countries
 and make a better
world
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