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People want to immigrate to rich countries. What are the reasons? Is this positive or negative?

#people #immigrate #countries
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In recent, years we have seen
people
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 from developing nations are immigrate to the developed
countries
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such
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 as the US, the UK for a better lifestyle and
people
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 more attractive to the western culture, in my ,opinion it is negative for
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 and
people
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.
To begin
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, immigration is not new to our
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, it is there from the early days when the British controlled the Asia
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. they have moved
people
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 from India, Ireland to the UK and various parts of the
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 to do tea planting, labour workers. In the modern ,
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this
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 has revoulded and the immigration programs in rich
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 calling the talented
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. for ,example developing
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 like India suffer from young talent resources. most of them are after eduction wanted move abord and
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 expecting a better lifestyle. Many developed
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 are skilled
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such
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 as like hairdress, nurses, carpenters. due to the ,pay high
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 to immigrate and
work
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 when they are moving out their own place it creates an inadequate supply in the market makes insufficient
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 demand. to avoid all these
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 should try to
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 in their own
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 and make their livelihood. Inconclusion,
People
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 should be mind full before to immigration, if they find working skill doesn't give proper
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 in own
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 finding a better opportune in different
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,
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 they should
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 on the same
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 and make a better
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