Some people believe that charities should help people in need no matter where those people are in the world. Others feel that these organisations should only serve the people living in the country where they are based. Discuss both sides and give your own view.

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Several

people

think that it is better for funded organisations to help

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needy

people

globally. whilst,

on the other hand

, individuals say that it

better

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for

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a chartiable

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chartiable

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charitable

organization to help

people

where they reside.

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essay agrees with the first statement because all

human

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humans

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are

same

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the same

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and it is bad to discriminate the humans. On the one hand, many masses argue that caring

organization

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organizations

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should help internationally with no injustice. By

this

the importance of every human will increase and at the same time the demonstration of

the

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qualities

such

as kindness and caring can be shown. Personally, I believe that if

people

help others in their rough

time

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times

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than

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then

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in future the results could be

same

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the same

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for them as well.

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, kalasa aid is known internationally to help

the

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citizens around the world. When in Bangladesh the disastrous event took place

then

this

organization helped the citizens

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that nation. On the other side, many think that

instead

of helping the refugees from various countries, it is good to take care of individuals who belong to the host country.

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them,

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residing in

host

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nation could be diseaseless and

will

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not be suffering from the calamitous events that could take place.

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this

essay

deny

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this

statement and believes that everyone should be served equally.

For instance

, Mumbai being a very renowned town suffers from rain each and every year.

Therefore

, khalsa aid supports the residents who

stuck

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in the disaster in that city. In conclusion, if the organizations take steps to support the residents who are being

effected

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affected

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in the world

due to

the unknown events

than

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then

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that could be a great thing to do.

However

, numerous

also

comment that it is far better to assist the one in

home

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the home

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nation rather than in

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the foreign

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. But the first statement works more than the second one.

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coherence cohesion

Improve the structure of the essay by including clear introduction and conclusion. Ensure that each paragraph focuses on developing a specific main point.

task achievement

Address the prompt more comprehensively and directly by discussing both sides of the argument. Provide clear, relevant examples to support your points.

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Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

311 words

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