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Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 line graph illustrates the modifies which happened on the
amount
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 of international
tourists
whom
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 arrived on
period
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the period
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 of fifteen years among five different countries. In general, it is clear from the graph that
on
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in
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 recent
year
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years
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both
USA
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the USA
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 and France have the highest
number
 of global
tourists
, while Egypt and Brazil have the lowest
number
.
On
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 the beginning of the
period
,
USA
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the USA
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 was the highest one and it is line started to increase until it reached it is
peak
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the peak
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 (around 90
million
visitors
). After that, it decreased suddenly to 80
million
visitors
. About France, the
number
 of
tourists
 rose constantly
on
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during
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 the whole
period
 until it
be
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 closed to
USA
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the USA
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.
Moreover
, about Malaysia, the
number
 of
tourists
 increased gradually
on
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in
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 the whole
period
 by around 20
million
visitors
.
In addition
, the lines of
both
 Brazil and Egypt only
went-up
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went up
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 slightly about 10
million
 more
tourists
. To sum up,
in
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at
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 the end of the
period
both
USA
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the USA
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 and France have the hugest
number
 of international
visitors
, while
both
 Brazil and Egypt have the smallest
number
.
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