Many students choose to study at colleges and universities that are far away from the places where they grew up. Do the benefits outweigh the drawbacks?

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Nowadays studying outside the native place is popular for tertiary education. There are many advantages like
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become pro-active and responsible . I believe that advantages outweigh disadvantages.
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conclusion.
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of all, studying outside the place where you brought up is a big step.
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become more responsible. When
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their own they are in control of everything like from managing study to
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finance
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will give a sense of responsibility. To cope up with the fees for
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they need to do jobs,
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,they can understand
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of money.
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. According to a survey of Gujarat Education board,
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who use to study away from home are 30% more responsible in their life compare to who studied at home.
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,
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become more aware
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their own work. Another major
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is,it broadens the mental horizon of the
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. If
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are living in a new city or country, they will try to understand other's
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and traditions. They will
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respect it.
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who are studying in Canada can communicate easily with other natives as
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will try to open up with other people.
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there are some downsides like
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may not study regularly,could bunk their classes. They can be addicted to adult
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like porn,alcohol because of loneliness. To conclude, studying away from has many upsides and downsides but the advantages are far more than disadvantages.
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, I believe that
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for it.
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