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Some people think that books are losing importance as a source of information and entertainment. To what extent do you agree?

#people #books #importance #source #information #entertainment
Books
 play a pivotal role in enhancing knowledge and it is
also
a
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 best source of recreation but nowadays these have been replaced by
e -
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books
 and internet sources . I think though other sources of information are getting in vogue nowadays
but
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books
 will not
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loose
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its
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their
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 charm easily.
To begin
 with, printed
books
 and notebooks are
first
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source
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 of information for children and they cannot be replaced by any other source. There are many benefits of using
books
such
 as
,
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lucid
explanation
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explanations
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 with creative drawings
make
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 things easier to learn for a beginner.
Secondly
, no strain on
eyes
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 which can arise while using
computer
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a computer
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 screen or
Laptops
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.
For example
, a recent survey provided that many children nowadays are suffering from eyesight problems from
early
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 age due to overexposure
with
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 led screens.
On the other hand
,
e journals
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e-journals
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 and sources can be very handy and accessible in
case
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the case
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for
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adults looking for information or reading anything. Keeping hard copies and maintaining them can be cumbersome so
that
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 can be converted into soft copies which require no space and are saved from any destruction.
For instance
, keeping old
books
 can be difficult and they require high maintenance so to convert them into soft copies and they are safe
in
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 a simple laptop. In summary, I would say though with
advent
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the advent
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 of
latest
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the latest
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 technology it is nowadays easier to get everything in just one click away but printed media is irreplaceable.
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