Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don’t. Discuss both these points of views and give your own opinion. Write at least 250 words.

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Sports are popular all over the world and professional
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become heroes for many
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, especially teenagers. They would like to emulate the way these stars dress, act and live their lives.
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many top athletes are good role models and responsible citizens, others are not deserving of their role model status.
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being good for their health, young
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are excited about sports because they admire their
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whose characters help them to learn about valuable life lessons
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as teamwork, goal setting, the reality of dealing with success and failure.
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, these personalities can make them understand the importance of working hard to achieve a goal or practicing regularly to become good at something. It can be said that
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is a good example for the youth to follow their idol.
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, it is undeniable that a few great athletes can make young
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misunderstand sportsmanship.
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, many top
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reached a level of fame that makes them attract media attention or social attention or even earn large financial benefits.
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of
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, teenagers love sports because they focus on fame and wealth rather than on the fun of the games or on the challenge of learning how to play well.
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, some
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behave badly, including some cheat to win their competitors or taking drugs to improve their performance. Eventually,
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kind of behaviour can send wrong messages to children. With all the above arguments, I think that young
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can make an attempt to catch all the good figures of their favourite
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but they should not try to repeat all of their idols’ lives because every professor has good and bad characters. All the
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can agree that there is no ideal person in the world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exemplify
  • perseverance
  • discipline
  • humble beginnings
  • motivate
  • inspire
  • teamwork
  • sportsmanship
  • negative behavior
  • drug abuse
  • unlawful activities
  • sensationalizes
  • unrealistic
  • unattainable standards
  • material success
  • skewed value system
  • high visibility
  • magnifies
  • faults
  • misleading
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