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People generally know that the environment is important. However, most individuals still don't take responsibilities to protect the environment. Why is this? What should be done to encourage people to protect the environment? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

In today's world, most
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 are aware to protect the environment but it all stumbles when it comes to
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. In
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 essay, I will detail what needs to be done to have overwhelming participation in saving the environment. In today's fast-moving world, human beings have become more attached to technologies rather than going with nature which is the main reason for polluting the surroundings. Even though
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government
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 are bringing strict norms but it all depends on the individual's responsibility.
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 had made numerous measures to curb the usage of plastics but
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 for
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convenience
 still using plastic bags which harms nature to a greater extent.
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people
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 do not see the effect of spoiling nature immediately.
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 should step in and frame stringent laws by imposing hefty fines, jail sentences for those who pollute the environment.
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, public littering is more common in developing countries, because there are no strict laws to punish
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 committing those mistakes.
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, there are few things which
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 should take control
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 leade those.
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, planting more trees, protecting
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, replacing carbon-emitting fuels with biogas and make stricter laws to make
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 follow it.
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 needs to do create more awareness creating programs to make
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 aware of what they are doing and the effects of their actions. To conclude, it is a collective effort of
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 and every individual in the world to make the planet safe for our
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 generation for healthy living.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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