Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different culture and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Music
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has been with
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in
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many years.Some
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think that
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is significant all
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ought to
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people
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of different culture and ages together.I believe that
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has
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important
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contribution to
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's recognition of other cultures.
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of all,the lyrics of
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from a country are similar to that country as
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an artist
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artist
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think
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of themselves as traditions when they write lyrics.
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,the song
istanbul
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Istanbul
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written by the singer Pamela tells the story of Istanbul and there are lots of like
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.When a person from another country
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as in England listens to
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song,they will know about there and if they are interested, they can investigate.
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,
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are
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music
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for knowing
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about different
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traditions. Another reason is
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.Individuals listen to
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another
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in another
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language
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other
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than
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that
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than
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their own.If they like the
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of the
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they listen to,they can want to
kearn
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learn
it.To give an example,the
Eurivision
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Eurovision
song contest is the biggest helper of
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since
contestes
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contests
contested
from countries around the world participate and sign in their native
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and everyone in the world can listen to it.That's why
,
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music
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can bring
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together. It's certainly true to say that
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is a very well way of bringing
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of different traditions and ages together.Some
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believe that it is correct while others think that it is wrong.In
cocnlusion
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conclusion
,
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who believe in it know different cultures with
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural diversity
  • harmony
  • integration
  • bridging gaps
  • foster
  • ignite
  • embrace
  • communicate
  • celebrate
  • appreciate
  • inclusivity
  • universal language
  • emotional resonance
  • shared experiences
  • intercultural dialogue
  • intergenerational connections
  • cultural exchange
  • catalyst
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