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These days many of us prefer to throw damaged thing away, whereas in the past people used to repair damaged items and keep them for a long time. Explain why you think this change has happened? What are the effects of this change in attitude?

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Over the years,
usage
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the usage
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 of
things
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have
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 been
change
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changed
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. A decade ago,
people
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 prefer to repair broken
things
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 but nowadays they prefer to buy new
things
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instead
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 of fixing broken parts.
This
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people
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 prefer
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new
things
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 over repairing and what effects on the environment.
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 with, a decade ago
things
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 were not easily available and that
time
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 was not a
time
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 of technology. These days
people
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 can buy
things
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 anything from anywhere at any
time
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. It is easily available. In the previous
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time
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 they fixed their old items and used
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then
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them
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.
Moreover
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, another reason for replacing old items with new
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ones is
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cost
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the cost
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 of
repairing
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themrepairing
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.
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, Apple's new phone is 1.5 lac and if there is a glitch in
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the phone
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then
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 its repairing cost is 1 lac
then
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people
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 prefer to buy new items.
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, wastage of electronic products
are
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 increasing day by day which is really harmful
for
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to
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 the environment.
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, a survey conducted
in
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at
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 Oxford University London by
the
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Richard Thompson in which found that electronic waste
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 as mobile phones and laptops is increasing which cannot be recycled. The government should organise some seminars to
aware
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the aware
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 community about wastage and effects on
environment
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the environment
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 To conclude,
people
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 prefer to replace their products with
new
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a new
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 one due to repairing
cost
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costs
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 and
easy
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the easy
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 availability of products.
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