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These days, mobile phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#phones #internet #people
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 do think the advantages overweigh the disadvantages. As
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technology
 is developing so fast,we are living in the information era.It’s the inevitable trend that will depend on the
Internet
 and electronic items in every aspect. Nowadays,various social applications are in vogue and appeal to lots of youngsters to download.The biggest problem we are facing is that indulging in
the
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mobile phones and
internet
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.In a study, the average
screen
 time among
the
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people today is 6-7 hours.It means that about half of the day the
screen
 is on.We ‘d rather spent time on
internet
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 or apps than spend time face-to-face chatting with others. But without the phones and
internet
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,
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 can’t imagine what our life would be like.Mobile
phone
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phones
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 and
internet
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 provide convenient and multiple ways for communicating.No matter where you are on the earth or even in space ,as long as you have wifi ,you will be able to see your friends and family’s faces on
this
 little “shining”
screen
.
Additionally
,
these
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technology
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 give us the chance to study online.You’ll gain huge amounts of information and knowledge by just clicking on the
screen
.
This
 advantage was shown especially in the covid-19 pandemic. Online teaching protected so many students from the outbreak of the virus. We have to remember that
Technology
 should always be a tool to us.All in all ,what matters the most is ourselves in the information era.I think that there are enough advantages to overweigh the shortcakes.Only do we appropriately use the
technology
 can we prevent ourselves from falling
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 the big holes of addiction.
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