Some people consider computers to be more of a hindrance than a help. Others believe that they have greatly increased human potential.How could computers to be considered a hindrance?

With the advent of new technology and advanced computerization , human efficiency has increased manifolds . Some opponents believe that
this
development brought more problems than a help. I will discuss my views in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, with the technical advancements in the cyberspace field nowadays anything which one desires is one click away . With the
digitilization
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digitalization
digitization
of offices and workplaces ,
human
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workload has decreased enormously.
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, many retail stores earlier used to hire
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number of workforce to maintain its function and nowadays due to computerization, most of the record work and billing work is done in big computers that too in just a minute by one person
instead
of many.
On the contrary
,
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school of thought postulates that
this
development brought more drawbacks than advantages.
Firstly
,everyday large data is fed in the computers which
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an infringe to personal information.
For example
, in many departmental stores , billing sections demand
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credit card details of customers which can ultimately lead to
cyber crimes
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.
Secondly
, technical glitches are common due to poor network issues. Many errors arise due to ill management of issues by
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. In summary,
this
trend of
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things
have
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brought
revolution
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in
human
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workforce along with many limitations which are inevitable.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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