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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinion on this?

#supermarkets #food #country #imports
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Globalisation and aircraft technology has made the
world
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 extremely small, which have helped immensely in the import and export business throughout the globe.
Although
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 some
countries
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 still sell the local food grown in their own
country
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, rather than exporting from overseas. In my opinion, I disagree with
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 approach as there are many small
countries
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, who lack
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rich natural resources and cannot fulfil the community demand.
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, all
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 in the
world
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 do not share equal and fertile natural resources. There are many areas in the
world
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 where vegetation and resource depletion is the major issue for human survival. Take,
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, Singapore, the entire
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 is an island with
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 population of around 5 million and no fertile land for farming, the
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 is surrounded by water bodies from all sides.
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, people of
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countries
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 are immensely dependent on neighbouring
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 like Malaysia, Thailand and India for food. Another point to consider is that importing goods will help explore the other varieties of foods available in the different parts of the
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.
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, certain types of fruits and vegetables which are high in nutrients and glycemic values are only accessible through import. Take ,
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, avocadoes, they are enormously packed with varieties of nutrients, vitamins and good fat, they are the
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 choice of fruit by the doctors when suggesting patients or public for a healthy diet. For
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 reason, exploring the diversity of plants and other items will be an advantage. In conclusion, I strongly disagree that the
countries
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 should only sell food products produced within their own
country
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 as there are numerous
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 in the
world
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 who needs a helping hand.
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, cross
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 vegetation can help unlock countless other diverse edibles.
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