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some people prefer to buy local products while others product international products. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #products #product
In day
to day
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 , the life we generally used a lot of things in which some of them are local products while other are international
one
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. Sometimes it depends upon the quality and availability of a
product
, if the
product
 is good in inbuilding the buying a local
product
 is not a bad choice. Sometimes we experience bad with international brands
also
 and they are expensive too. In every country and government ,
,
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first
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 try to convince public to
use
 their own homemade things and avoid to buy a cheap
product
 like made in china. Suppose if we only shop for local products for our daily routine need
then
 we support our government economically
also
 which mean GDP od country gets strong every year. The benefits of
the
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homemade products are that the availability of things is always for people and quality is not compromised. While the other opine is quite different they believe that if we purchase something expensive and branded them the life and
use
 of the
product
 is
also
 much better
then
 local one's, so a higher ,price if we buy it
then
 there is no need to but them again and again, if we want to know Which one is best in the market
then
 we should try both once. Money is not a priority for them they believe in the quality and easy
use
 of the
product
. In ,
the
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conclusion we can say that the choice of
product
use
 is different for everyone. In ,
the
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society we belong to a different class, so it is obvious that their choices are
also
 different.
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