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In some countries young people move in their own homes in early twenties, in other countries they live with parents longer. What do you think, do the advantages of living alone outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, the youth generation is demonstrating a tendency to stay with
parents
 for a longer period, rather than striving to start a faster an independent life. In my opinion, the drawbacks of
this
 approach outweigh all benefits since the experience of living alone offer indisputable opportunities for a person’s growth and development of a stable psychological stability To start with, one of the main positive effects of staying with
parents
 for the young generation is their financial stability.
This
 is because living with
parents
 may save a lot of money which had to have been spent not only on rent and utility bills but
also
 on grocery bills and clothes. As a consequence, reducing everyday expenditures contributes not only to saving money but
also
 to the opportunity of using it as an investment for future financial independence.
However
, it is clear that on no account should
the
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 desire to overspend
this
 freed up money for useless shopping be ignored. One of the main drawbacks associated with staying with a parent for a long time is the absence of chances to gain own experience and learn life lessons. The reason for
this
 is that being with
parents
 is freed youngsters from solving various routine questions beginning from grocery and cooking and ending with financial literacy for distributing future cashflows and planning expenses.
As a result
, the current youth generation remains infantile and not being able to make own decision, which
further
 affects their ability to withstand life's difficulties and causes various psychological problems.
For example
, according to statistics, persons who start living separately from their
parents
 at the age of 18 are more sustainable for life’s challenges and more responsible for their decisions than individuals who separated from
parents
 in their 25. In conclusion, I am strongly convinced that despite the advantage of saving the personal budget of a young person while living in a family house there are indisputable disadvantages of
this
 approach as an inability to tackle life’s challenges without compromising their psychological stability.
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