Many countries spend large amounts of money on world sporting events such as the Olympic Games and football World Cup. Instead these monies can be spent on encouraging young children to take up sports at a young age. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Plenty of countries invest a huge quantity of money in international gaming ceremonies.
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whole expenditure can be used to encourage youngsters
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up sports
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.Even though I see a point in it , I am not totally inclined with the given scenario.The aim of
this
essay is to elaborate on my opinion. On one hand, I feel that there is a need to spend some amount in hosting and preparing the arena for worldwide sporting events because through these events the entire world looks at a nation and understands its capacity.
Hence
, these are very prestigious functions.
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, only after a lot of hard
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the opportunity of hosting an event comes to a country.
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it is the responsibility of that nation's leaders to see that the event is organized in a grand way so that it showcases the interest and the capability of that land.
On the other hand
, perhaps ,I
also
feel that encouraging pupils to take sports at
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school stage itself is very much necessary
due to
the following reasons.
Firstly
, at
this
age, a child's body is so flexible and can
also
be toned easily. Indeed, exercise and games are the best way to have a fit body throughout their life.
Secondly
, some kids may get very
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interested and can
finally
take up a game more seriously and come out to represent the country in junior championships.
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, even at a small age , a few pupils are seen to have a huge sporting spirit.
As a result
, they may become the future sporting heroes of a country.
To conclude
, the essay has discussed my opinion on the given statement along with the reasons.
Overall
, I opine that it is the responsibility of the Governments to look after their prestige and
also
inspire and motivate the younger children to look into sports.
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