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think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#years #time #people’s #lives #adult #life #happiness #spite #responsibility
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Some argue that
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lives
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 happiest during
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 period. while others believe that
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adulthood brings more happiness
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 greater
responsibility
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. In my opinion, I believe that young peoples,
lives
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 are happiest than adults.
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 all, from an economical point of view,
teenagers
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 are not aware
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 the conditions that
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 in the daily life.
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, most
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 do not know the facts that affect the country economy
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 as oil prices in the world.
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 it is very common that young peoples do some jobs in present times, most
teenagers
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 do not have financial responsibilities like rents or housing costs owing to their parents afford these costs. Another good reason to state that teenager years are the best times in
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's
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, is that during school periods young students are focused mainly
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 the academic environment.
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,
teens
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 live their life in a
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 scenario in which the connected activities like sportive championships music festivals and even scientific competitions represent the daily duties that young peoples should deal with
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, From a social perspective,
teenagers
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 do not fear
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social concepts or discrimination.
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, they live as they consider.
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 are involved in
sport
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 activities, and
voluntaries
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 organizations as well. Those relationships undoubtedly are common among young
people
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 rather than adults. In conclusion,
teenagers
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 years are the happiest for most
people
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 due to the activities they normally do. There are
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 worries about current affairs like oil markets or political situations.
teenagers
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 are commonly are not influenced by social gossip.
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, school times are very important in the
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teens
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 ages because
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 positive influence that it has in young's
lives
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.
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