In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is a known fact that only small-scale of
individual
is earning high wages in many nations. There are those who argued that Add an article
the individual
an individual
this
situation beneficial
for the citizens and government while others suggest that limitations in Add a missing verb
is beneficial
wage
gap should be applied by authorities. Correct article usage
the wage
This
essay will discuss both views and try to reach a conclusion.
First
and foremost, it is undeniable that some professions
are earning significantly high income
than others. Fix the agreement mistake
incomes
Such as
football players, politicians, actresses and actors, are able to live a Correct quantifier usage
As
luxury
lifestyle while other vocations have to accept being in a middle class Replace the word
luxurious
such
as doctors, teachers, nurses and polices. It is obvious that popularity and recognition by people
changes how much these people
earn and they can use this
fame for the citizens
sake by helping them or representing them in an international area. Change to a genitive case
citizen's
citizens'
For
instance
Lady Diana was the most known royal family member throughout the world and she tried to use her fame to support Add a comma
,instance
people
who suffer AIDS
.
Change preposition
from AIDS
However
, it is probably true to say that professions
which contribute to society
most are public vocations Add an article
the society
such
as doctors, teachers and polices. Undoubtedly in
many Change preposition
on
occasions
our lives and future depends on not only their performance but Add a comma
,occasions
also
their well-being. Many people
agrees
that these Change the verb form
agree
professions
should be given more attention and their salaries should be protected by government
. Add an article
the government
For
example
Spanish government faced many discussions regarding Add a comma
,example
low
wages of nurses during the pandemic. Million-dollar football players were criticised Correct article usage
the low
by
their Change preposition
for
Correct your spelling
lifestyles
life styles
while nurses only gaining 1500 Euro per month and Correct your spelling
lifestyles
this
cause unwillingness to be in a health care system within next
generations.
In conclusion, undeniably there is a small privileged Correct article usage
the next
people
who earning
much more money than others Change the form of the verb
earn
however
this
Change the determiner
this person
these people
people
can contribute the society when they use their repute. But I believe that the professions
which touch peoples life more should prioritise
and protect Add a missing verb
be prioritise
with
authorities strongly.Change preposition
by
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