In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is a known fact that only small-scale of
individual
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is earning high wages in many nations. There are those who argued that
this
situation
beneficial
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is beneficial
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for the citizens and government while others suggest that limitations in
wage
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gap should be applied by authorities.
This
essay will discuss both views and try to reach a conclusion.
First
and foremost, it is undeniable that some
professions
are earning significantly high
income
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incomes
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than others.
Such as
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football players, politicians, actresses and actors, are able to live a
luxury
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lifestyle while other vocations have to accept being in a middle class
such
as doctors, teachers, nurses and polices. It is obvious that popularity and recognition by
people
changes how much these
people
earn and they can use
this
fame for the
citizens
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sake by helping them or representing them in an international area.
For
instance
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Lady Diana was the most known royal family member throughout the world and she tried to use her fame to support
people
who suffer
AIDS
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.
However
, it is probably true to say that
professions
which contribute to
society
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most are public vocations
such
as doctors, teachers and polices. Undoubtedly
in
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many
occasions
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our lives and future depends on not only their performance but
also
their well-being. Many
people
agrees
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that these
professions
should be given more attention and their salaries should be protected by
government
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the government
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.
For
example
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Spanish government faced many discussions regarding
low
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wages of nurses during the pandemic. Million-dollar football players were criticised
by
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their
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lifestyles
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life styles
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lifestyles
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while nurses only gaining 1500 Euro per month and
this
cause unwillingness to be in a health care system within
next
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generations. In conclusion, undeniably there is a small privileged
people
who
earning
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much more money than others
however
this
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this person
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people
can contribute the society when they use their repute. But I believe that the
professions
which touch peoples life more should
prioritise
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and protect
with
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authorities strongly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • incentivize
  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
  • social unrest
  • innovate
  • government intervention
  • salary cap
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