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Writing Samples
Band 6

Instructions
Read the question below and write a letter.

 You are looking for a part-time job at a golf club.
Write a letter to the manager of the golf club.
In your letter, introduce yourself
explain what experience and special skills you have
tell him/her when you could start

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my interest
to
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in
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 the announced part-time position at your
golf
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 club. I have read in the newspaper about the requirements needed and
is
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am
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 thrilled to apply for the job. My name is James Hook, I am a college student in my senior year at the
university
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University
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 of Thuffs. I live in the university
dormity
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dormitory
that is
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 located about 3 km away from your
golf
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 court. From a very young age, I was introduced to the
golf
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 fields, since my father was a member
in
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 our local home town club.
In addition
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, to that I had trained and practiced
golf
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 during high school.
This
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 made me familiar with the various tools, preparations and organizing of the
golf
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 kit.
This
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also
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 helped me in developing many skills
such
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 as time management and concentration.
Therefore
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, I can assure you that I am a good fit
to
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for
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this
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 role.
Moreover
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, I am ready to start working from next week. I am available from the 20th of October. Please do not hesitate to
conduct
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contact
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 me via email
that is
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 [email protected], if any additional information is required. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, James Hook.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to check grammatical errors and clarify your phrases for better understanding.
task achievement
Include more details about your skills, such as specific tasks you’re capable of performing at the golf club.
task achievement
You introduced yourself effectively and provided relevant background information.
task achievement
The letter maintains a polite and formal tone throughout, suitable for a job application.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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