In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food Do you agree or disagree?

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In some, countries the increase in health problems is
as a result
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of chemicals included in the production of fast
food
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essay will highlight the merits and demerits of eating fast
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firstly
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, fast
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production has increased over the years due to its convenience and accessibility.
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has become so acceptable in a society that many individuals cook no more but will rather order takeouts.
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, individuals
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as doctors and nurses who don't have time to prepare meals for themselves find it more convenient to go out to a fast-
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food food
restaurant as
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will save more time.
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, fast
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restaurants are easily accessible and convenient, which is a factor of unhealthy living. due to the fast ,
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we living some individuals don't have time to prepare healthy meals that will nourish their bodies.
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, studies have shown that countries
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as American have the highest rate of obesity which is
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of high consumption of fast
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which is made up of numerous chemicals, fats and so on
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I believe the increase in tax won't stop the fast-growing growth/reduction of fast
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production, the government should aim at a healthier way of producing or enforcing laws on fast-
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restaurants in producing healthier meals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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