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Some people think that sending criminals to prison is not effective. Education and job training should be used instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that the government should provide better
education
 and job training
instead
 of putting a criminal in
prison
. Personally,
this
 is a one-sided point of view.
Therefore
, I totally disagree with
this
 statement and my own reasons will be outlined in the following essay.
Firstly
, there are a large number of reasons why it is unreasonable to think imprisonment to be ineffective. The
prison
 has existed as one of the embodiments of justice and fairness in society for hundreds of years. If the
people
 have unlawful behaviour which is a misdemeanour or a felony, they should be sentenced or the community will fall into chaos. The
prison
 not only keeps the criminals far away from
the
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innocent
people
 but
also
 is a reminder of the consequences of breaking the law. Protecting human rights plays a vital role in
the
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 peaceful world.
As a result
, the more stable the society is, the better living standard becomes. In theory, providing better
education
 and employment skills is a way to enhance
people
’s awareness and reduce
unemployment
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 rate. It is true,
however
,
this
 way can not completely eliminate all the elements that let a person turn
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 a criminal. In fact, many developed countries which provide good
education
 and job skills have
high
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crime
rate
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. More specifically, there are many heinous crimes posed by the well-educated. We can not deny the fact that some
people
 who are immoral by nature and psychologically unstable show
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 obvious propensity for
crime
.
Hence
, it is naive to believe that
education
 and job skills force
people
 to follow the law more effectively than imprisonment does. All in all, better
education
 and employment training are not the ultimate answer to
crime
, they can not replace
prison
 sentences to punish the criminals. It should be considered that the combination of both methods can truly make good progress in decreasing
crime
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 rate and keeping the world safe.
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