Most artist earn low salaries and should therefore receive funding from the government in order for them to continue with their work. To what extent do you agree.

Art
is a creative form of expression .It preserves and reflects the culture of a particular nation.Many
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follow
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their passion and continue to take up
art
as their career.
However
, unfortunately,most of them have less income. It is argued that
artist
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sould
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should
could
be monetarily supported by the government so that they can proceed
further
.I completely agree with
this
notion
an
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the same shall be discussed in
this
essay.
To begin
with,
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artists
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have the power to communicate through
there
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their
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art
forms.They connect people together of same interests irrespective of
boundries
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boundaries
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throughout
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through out
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the globe.Through
art
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our surroundings are made
colourfull
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colourful
and vibrant.
Moreover
, they help in instilling values amongst society by highlighting their traditions in their
art
forms.
For example
, India is a diverse country with various forms of folk dance
which
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are specific for a particular state like,
kuchipudi
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dance is indigenous to Andhra
pradesh
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • national identity
  • economic benefits
  • tourism
  • employment
  • investment
  • government support
  • patronage
  • crowdfunding
  • allocation
  • criteria
  • artistic freedom
  • innovation
  • emerging artists
  • diverse forms
  • creative industry
  • financial struggles
  • drawbacks
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