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The society is based on rules and laws. The society would not function well if individuals were free to do whatever they want. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Laws
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 refer to the rules imposed on human beings. I do think that law played a significant role in regulating our behaviours though it can
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 sometimes restrict our freedom. Undoubtedly,
laws
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 inevitably restrain
people
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’s freedom and thereby hinder social progress to some degree.
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, if one
country
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 has many restrictions on the
business
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 world, the
business
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 activity will not thrive. High-income earners who are subject to high-income tax rates may lack the motivation to make greater efforts to increase their income. The government can relax regulations to unlock the potential of these
people
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, which can contribute to social progress.
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, if no law regulated
people
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’s behaviours, a
country
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 would be in chaos and the economy would collapse. To give an example, if
people
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 do not obey traffic regulations, traffic accidents will increase and traffic congestion will become a problem. The revenue of numerous businesses will be affected because their products cannot be delivered efficiently.
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, in a
country
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 where there are no
laws
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 to punish those merchants who sell fake products online, consumers will stop shopping on the Internet and
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country
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 will suffer economically.
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, moral principles are
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 important;
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,
people
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 will not be able to develop a respectful and trusting relationship. They are sometimes motivated by self-interest to do something that would be harmful to others,
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 as betraying the trust of their
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 partners, but
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 would cause damage to their relationship. If
people
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 do not fulfil their promises, they will find it difficult to conduct
business
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 together, and arguments will reduce productivity. It is fair to say that no society could function well when
people
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 lack mutual trust. To summarize, it is reasonable to regulate
people
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’s behaviour by a wide range of
laws
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 and rules even though something many
people
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 are willing to do or try will be restrained or even forbidden.
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